MALICE マーリス 10-16

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[b]“Muselline!” Karo shouted as she rose her hands up into the air.
She took a mighty breath as the ethereal light surrounded her.
Her rave bracelets began to clang as she shook her hands wildly.
“Compel the power of… SUBSCRIPTION.”

For the sake of continuity and convenience, I hyperlinked every incomplete song I have listed so far. :D[/b]

“Karo!” Muselline said as he put his hands up.
He breathed as light was around him.
His bare wrists made no noise as he waved his hands.
“THANK YOU.”

…and thats how you make yourself look bad everyone…

I went and added on an epic denouement to Triggerheart. So guys, here it is! c:
Triggerheart v2.0

Not bad, not bad.
Its nothing great though
The metal guitar ruined it, through out most of the song. It was just toooo high of tempo to have the metal guitar notes that short constantly.
I like that you used some of the lesser instruments (electricity and crystal), but the electricity didn’t sound all that great.
This song seems to have some problems that I used to have, and still sorta have nowadays. This song had the problem on not changing up the note lengths.
I would only use eight notes at that tempo for a solo, or just for a fast part of an awesome metal riff…
Here is some famous words of the great Roastmaster himself (lol), that you should take to heart and have been repeated to me by StarWars many times.

Ready? Brace yourself, this may blow your mind!

METAL GUITAR IS ALPHA GUITAR
It should and needs to be number 1!!! It is a loud demanding guitar that can be hard to use and is only for pros if used above C4 or below C2.
I think you need to pull away from the metal guitar. Its always good to change it up. But you seem to come to the same instruments alot i see.
Harpsicord, Synth (#3 i think), and some other instruments that don’t come to mind.
Maybe you should work on heresy maybe? That seemed like the start of an instrument change up, for all i know that could have built up to some big orchestral piece.

Okay i think im done here lol.

Despite all this if i haven rated your song yet (don’t feel like checking (AND I HATE HOW WHEN YOU HAVE A LONG POST THE STUPID BAR THAT CONTROLS WHERE YOU ARE AT ON THE POST MOVES UP AND DOWN LIKE CRAZY OMG-sorry it made me mad enough that i had to voice this) since im very lazy lol) i rate it a 4/5.

EDIT: I listened to some more, but i had to stop at sheet 46… that sadly was close to an ear rape… don’t get over confident. I think your starting to develop this overconfidence in yourself. Don’t worry we all go through it here… i defenatly have and struggle to be the critic on myself for every new song i make…

HOPEFULLY IM DONE

-----------I will listen to more------will add more if anything comes up-------

Sounded sucky man… definatly went downhill from the very start… It started out at a 4.5 and ended at a 3.5

That is my final rating 3.5

It was sloppy, but i do see you have talent, but it was used in the wrong way. Listen to your song over and over, and critique it over and over, changing what you don’t like. You may have to start over a few times to get it right, and delete 3 or 4 sheets cause you don’t like the way its going.

A good song isnt done in a day.
Rome wasnt built in a day.
Remember that

It made me think of this, just not even close to as bad, and i hope not a joke song rofl

I know you have lost of talent but i think you may be clouded by all the good songs you have made, and by how much everyone loves your songs.
(Cause there are other songs youve done that are really good )

Now get back up and make another song!!!

It was a good song … but there were some things wrong.
Sheet 39 was a bit too intense and was then followed up with some synth part that didn’t really fit in.
Also it could have been more repetitive.
And also as Kar said the metal guitar … didn’t sound right.

[b]Hm. Perhaps I have let all this glory permeate too far into my head. I can’t blame you guys for telling me the jarring truth…
That ain’t gon’ stop me.

Yeah, I often use the same instruments over and over again…
Bass Drum 5, Fender Strat Guitar, Harpsichord, Metal Guitar, Synth 1, Synthesizer 3, etc.
Heresy will probably allow me to stray from my usual set of instruments; hoping that will turn out well.
And hopefully my use of the metal guitar in Conquest will sound much more refined.
I’ll also attempt to moderate my repetition.

Thank you very much for the constructive criticism. c:[/b]

No problem, it all helps.
Everyone needs a “jarring” review every once in awhile.
I got the same kind of thing with my song “Heaven” (probably the most wrongly named song ever rofl). It had an awesome start and all, but after about sheet, eh 7 it went downhill from there. I used the green synth, and that was the worst part… it just sounded wack lol.
Afterwards it never really recovered lol

Collaborations actually help dramatically in that aspect, target someone who uses completely different instrument to you and try to adapt, I never used synths seriously or the pianos until i started to collaborate with Muselline, and when i collaborated with Ixsetf (using a completely different style) i learnt something as well, my drumming improved…quite alot. So by collaborating with people you can adapt and absorb new strategies of creating songs… hint Muselline is like always open for a collaboration XD (as well as being great to work with) hint

WOW! You’re right…

Very true, my collabs with StarWars[XD] definatly helped me.
No collabs come to mind that aren’t better than the normal for the one person on his/her own.
Last Bastion, Industrial Revolution, Revocation of Self, Enigma of Tranquility are a few

Since my last post on this thread, my cache got deleted.
I’m too unmotivated to play right now.
Please leave your message after the tone.

Beep
Don’t be un-motivated for too long!

I hope you didn’t lose anything too valuable.

Nah, just…
Continuations of Heresy and Cheer.
The beginning of an Avast Your Ass Remix.
And various changes to the Conquest (FIAB Remix). c:

mmm…
Karo… No one can be more lazy and unmotivated to complete songs as me
I have a lot of unfnished “unfinished songs” (generally from GH)
You made more of 10 great songs in a few days!

Please try and continue Heresy though.

I will. c:

I’d say that your songs are definately pretty good, but one thing I noticed about them is that most of them seem to be in the key of C minor (is that right? I’m not too good with minor keys) and I think you should try to make something maybe on a major key possibly, or just a different key overall. Actually, a key change would be pretty fun. Overall though I like your songs.