an intriguing song, the first thing I would point out for fixing would be that the song has no buildup other than the first few sheets. you need a new section of the song, with different instruments and that has a different feel to it. I also get the feeling that you were trying to use the violin as a melody, but the point of a melody or a riff, is to keep it short enough that you can remmember it easily after hearing the song just once. Other then that it looks decent except for a few chords that sound too dissonant despite the type of the song. ex:in sheet 5 the last chord has a guitar with c# and the violins with c, I would suggest straying away from chords with a semitone difference (a semitone is a # or 
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really?!?! freakin emoticons, that was supposed to say flat not a freakin dude with glasses.
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