How about the idea: The Dark Metal Factory?
Too Original.
A little grim, don’t you think?
I think you should take out two of the 8th sheets you have.
Otherwise this a quality work from you. I was expecting metal guitar somewhere in it from the name of it.
Needs more sheet 2. That’s my favorite sheet, and would have been an amazing metal riff IMO. Do more songs like this, and then maybe build a bit more on your drums and melodies, and you will easily make quality works people will love.
But seriously, I’m in love with sheet 2 here.
Also, needs more electric guitar. That was some very quality electric guitar work. Everything just really needs to be longer in this song. When stuff like that ends so soon it makes me sad 
NO! TO EPIC! LOOK AWAY!
I Know. That Was A Mistake Kam. Epic Fur Sure!
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