Nice, but the key change at 6:00 was odd
I’m not going to suggest re-writing the entire song if you like how it is, but I will say the best part is the first minute & a half. Having the intro be the greatest thing about a song can make it worse than if the best bit is the chorus or something because it builds up this expectation that doesn’t really pay off.
measure 14 (00:19:21) I dont think those first chords should be major. same thing at measure 47.
I actually really like the grungey feel/sound you got.
I liked most of it (especially the very nice “round” sound I always talk about, you got that) I liked measure 94-110… twas nice.
So, the over all quality of the song = nice
The originality of the song = just ok (but the chorus… the chorus was the most generic thing I have ever heard)
Its a bit long at 6:47
I love the rit at 221
I’d prefer you end it at the part where the voxes play on their own by having them fade away. This is a good time to work on the content of the previous parts of the songs. Start with the chorus, then move to the bridges.
THANK YOU PLUS LIKE THE SECOND HALF OF THE SONG WAS THE SAME EXACT CHORD PROGRESSION GENERIC POOPSTAIN. Except the sheets after 52, I really like that sound and style.