Kamarai…WRONG.
The song was not repetitive as far as I can see, because repetitiveness comes from having the song feel longer than it actually is, making you anticipate an awesome change that you can’t wait for. To achieve repetitiveness the song, in short, has to be so boring it makes you want to skip ahead to the cool part (I.E. Suffering. Speaking of which, I think Whitefang allowed Muse’s uncanny love of the song get to his head).
The drumming was great, all except for the bass #2, which alone doesn’t ruin the drumming, especially when it is not playing. My only critique is that sheet 12 would have been so great if the snare had been every off beat and not every beat.
The Synth Bass is not too hard to get, it can sound great both high and low. The only thing you need to be careful of is using it high, because it will sound like you are copying off of On the Moon (such as in Fishrocker’s The Search for the Lost Striped Shirt I think). In fact I think we have a new combo, because the synth bass sounds amazing with the green synth.
I do have a few problems with the song. Synthesizer #3 is too quiet for some parts of the song. Such as sheet 3. And of course sheet 3 shouldn’t be the chorus. It doesn’t have enough energy. The ending is a bit sudden, the intro is too progressive for my liking. Sheet 4 sounds like a pirate shanty or something in slow motion. But they are all over shadowed by the part i like best about this song:
Wait for it…TEMPO CHANGES. This song has them and most don’t. It’s amazing that a song this slow doesn’t become repetitive quick. These had a huge part, and it all culminates in the sheet 8-13-8-14 etc progression. The hiccupy drumming here is perfect, I just love how it seems to speed up and slow down so constantly. Great.
To be honest, tempo changes do not make a song and they really shouldn’t be a major critique point. This song doesn’t boast much, just some odd drumming, a nice synthesizer, and a great combo for the bass. And I think that’s fine. It’s a nice, nice slow, humble song that just feels…right. I won’t give it a 4 (though I certainly will vote it that), but I think it deserves a solid 3.7/5. If I could change anything, I would change out that bass #2 (for probably #5 or #3), take the on beat snares out of sheet 12, and make the synthesizer #3 a little louder in the earlier sheets.
Also I must critique the critics some. Look at my signature. It talks to the song writer who receives critique. It tells them that just because someone was willing to write a paragraph about your song instead of a sentence, your song is great. PERIOD. That doesn’t apply as much in this thread, where the writers are actually asking for critique, but my words still hold true. Just because you are critiquing a song does not give you the right to ravage it unless the song was made with no apparent effort. Always try to look for the good in a song you think is bad before writing a whole paragraph about how the song should have never existed. remember, you are just a listener, you did not use an overly high amount of effort to listen to the song. The writer may have spent a week or more making the song. This puts you as being under the original writer when you critique the song. At the very least you should give him/her the consideration that they spent a good amount of time and effort making the song for FREE before writing. If you are going to critique, please do it right.
EDIT: Oh haha. I gave the exact same rating. But for Sandalman, remember that when Kamarai said it as a bad rating (he even gave you TWO points for potential…something that doesn’t exist), I give it as an above average type rating.
