The Feeble by SteveHarris

This one is a bit happier than normal. Also, a slow slower; less upbeat. Most of my songs are very frantic/upbeat, so I’d figure this is a welcome change. Need criticism to get better, so leave your two cents in the comments, please.

This sounds very awkward. Not a very catchy tune, either.

OK, any suggestions?

Try changing the tempo and make transitions.

The concept’s good, but I think you’re taking the wrong approach to it.