I plan on making this an actual full length song, so feedback is wanted
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Some of the note choices are just weird. Once the drums kick in the abnormality of it calms a bit, but for the beginning I have a few suggestions:
- Maybe change up the end of the first phrase, specifically the E-A-D-F that is going on with the piano and guitar. I tried changing it and found other ways, such as E-G-E-D (same octave), but anything you like would work. Other parts could use a little fine tuning too, just to make it flow a bit better.
20 minutes later after erasing about 10 paragraphs of writing - If the piano and guitar are essentially acting as a duet for the melody, add other instruments behind them to give the whole piece some more “depth”. Although the two and later the bass are nice, there is a whole lot of pausing in which only one instrument is playing or sustaining through at one time, which for some reason just doesn’t sound right in this case. I’m nitpicking on this one, but oh well.
I keep erasing everything so I’ll stop there, don’t forgot to change everything up a bit to avoid over repetition; anyways, have a nice day.
Edit: Harmonies!