Your World, My World by Slippy

Slippy · August 19, 2011, 5:48pm

mrteddy6564 · August 19, 2011, 9:56pm

I see you haven’t taken any of the advice I gave you in the first criticism… fair enough I guess I will just continue from where I left off.
From sheet 13 it really just drones on for a while, why so empty slippy? I like the drum fill at the end of sheet 13, but I do think you should have changed the chord progression OR SOMETHING during the second guitar solo. As for the guitar solo it is quite short and kind of quiet, and does little to break the repetition. Im actually happy that you were able to create quite a long break between the breaks and chorus, granted it didn’t help the repetition but nonetheless it did last pretty long. After the chorus I like how you immediately start the solo this time instead of going through the same background filler for a phrase. Surprisingly enough (that was kinda sarcasm) you start the solo with the same background again. Im just going to say you aren’t going to make great music by being lazy. As for this solo I do not think you should have chosen the srat guitar at such a high octave for the solo. The strat guitar sounds horrible anywhere above c#5. I really don’t like the D#, I personally think it would be batter on an E. I also don’t like the length of the solo, being 10 seconds. Then after those 10 seconds you go right back into the melody you used in the chorus then drone on with the same background filler, which I was expecting by now. The ending is ok. So basically the gist of what I think should be improved is the repetitiveness, try to not be lazy and change the background. On stars scale i’d give it a 4.0/5.0, on my scale i’d give it a 3.5/5.0.

Now off to write another review >_<.

AlphamaleCurtis · August 19, 2011, 10:47pm

I have to agree with teddy on this one, a good song, but seemed a bit repetitive…

Kamarai1 · August 21, 2011, 2:57am

It would do better as a real song, but on notessimo where vocals are crap… well, not so much

dynamyte24124 · October 10, 2011, 9:10pm

omfg, this is a rip off from ashleybas10’s 2nd song

ashley_bas101 · October 12, 2011, 6:16pm

although im slightly flattered, i have no idea which song you mean and im fine with this.

dynamyte24124 · October 13, 2011, 10:04pm

ok? idk how you dont know how you dont know your second song but ???

Domagoj_Riddle_Kukec · March 26, 2012, 6:06pm

realy good i dont know how to downald this for mobile device can sombody tell me

Aliens_Exist · April 5, 2012, 7:20am

mrteddy6564:

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