Thank-you =)
…and you’ll probably glad to know that a decent length song is on its way 
!!1 (Due to sudden inspiration :3)
EDIT: Definitely on its way…all i have to do is click share =D!!
I personally think this is my best song yet =P
I’ll be sharing tomorrow…
~R.I.P. 4th Bot Post
=D Share today!
Here it is…Enjoy !!
Tranquility
it was good.
Well here are some things I didn’t like:
I didn’t like the D chord in the fourth measure of every sheet, because it sounded major and didn’t fit in. (Fmin has Db).
I didn’t very like the way the steel drums were so irregular.
In measure 31 there was conflict between D and Db.
The guitars didn’t fit in with the violins in measure 35.
Just becareful with the guitars, sometimes the melody jumps to a high or low note and sounds a but awkward.
In measure 61, I wound substitute the high guitar Eb.
There was no ending chord.
The song was very repetitive. Nothing seemed to happen later in the song, and those violins were the same in every sheet. I would have sped all the slow sheets up, and added additional instruments. Also the chorus (which I assume is the steel drum part) sounds very similar to the verses. Also there was no bridge. So it kinda dragged on.
But the song was good! I was surprised by the style. It had some great melodies, and drums (as usual). Just seemed to be unnecessarily long. Great work!
I’d just like to say that my aim in making this song was to be peaceful, and as it is a slow-ish song, lengthy. However…i’m terrible at having too any instruments…because then i’ll start making a lot of dissonant sounds 
Thank-you for your feedback 
Ya the steel drums were a bit wierd, and it dragged on.
It seemed a bit sad for being called tranquility though
True XD
I think my inspiration is gone now…
so…no more songs for a while…
Also,
New Loop (basically its just to clear up space in my saved songs…)
Yup…so i managed to do this…somehow…XD
This is in response to Star’s comment about my other drowning song which should’ve been named drownED (i will change that on the front page now…)
Anyway…enjoy this suspenseful song with epic drumming
I think that is one of your best songs (maybe apart from tranquility).
But I didn’t really see anything wrong with it, apart from the fact that it was repetitive. You should have put some kind of bridge, or solo in it, and you could have added more instruments. I always add an instrument at the very end. Also there wasn’t much background noise. But it was very good, congrats!
Thank you again
I will continue to seek my goal :3
(in making a feature worthy song that is…)
Wow this isn’t a collab?
Because of the way this song is organized, I’m going to try a different style of critque today and see how well it works, so bear with me. Also, before I get into it, I want to say that I mostly agree with Nuse, I’m just going to go a bit deeper.
Key: I’ll go over each sheet, and in parenthesis I’ll put my interpretation of what part of the song the sheet plays, along with some critique. If there is a space between two reviews, it indicates a change in section type.
Sheet 0 (intro a): I quite liked the jazzy intro riff.
Sheet 1 (intro :shock:: I felt the metal guitar was dissonant, and the fade-in is overused.
Sheet 2 (transition 1a): At this point I was starting to notice the little things, like the echo effect. A lot of effort is put into those with a rather minimal gain, so thanks for spending the time to do them.
Sheet 3 (transition 1b): I felt the metal guitar sounded better at this tempo for some reason. Loved the progressive drumming through out the transition. And is that my fade in effect?!?!?!? I feel honored that you think it’s good enough to include into your drumming style 
Sheet 4 (chorus 1a): At this point I felt the lack of instruments real hard. Needs a high-hat, bass, and a lead instrument to fill this void
Sheet 5 (chorus 1b): Didn’t notice any changes while listening, had to look at it visually to find them, and was a bit disappointed to see only a drum change.
Sheet 6 (post-chorus 1/verse 1a): A good transition, but again, the emptiness of the song shows.
Sheet 7 (verse 1b): Love the modular panning, it was done well. A bit show-offy, but it helps distract from the unfinished feel of the song.
Sheet 8 (verse 1c): I liked the fill at the end, but I believe this sheet is only there to add time and structure, not to help introduce the next sheet.
Sheet 9 (transition 2): Absolutely loved this sheet, except for the huge rise in power compared to the previous and later sheets. Again, sheet 8’s fill isn’t quite enough to fully balance the rise in power.
Sheet 10 (chorus 2a): Okay so you did add a lead, but I still think there’s more to be done.
Sheet 11 (chorus 2b): I did like the change in the lead, but it has the same problem as sheet 5.
Sheet 12 (post-chorus 2): You just duplicated sheets and got rid of the higher stuff. While that’s good for introducing a background part of the song, it is a bit lazy. I know you were establishing a base for the solo, but to be honest, I think a slower background is better for creating a “blank-page” on which you can write a solo. Establish a chord-structure to the solo, and add everything else after the solo is done. The whole point of a solo is to be free with your writing, having to write a solo to something only restricts that.
Sheet 13 (guitar solo/duel 1a): I think I’d rather just hear a solo on the acoustic guitar, we need more of those. And the metal guitar just really doesn’t work as a solo instrument. It just sounds like a speed metal riff.
Sheet 14 (guitar solo/duel 1b): Same problem, although I would add that the empty feeling is present even here in the solo.
Sheet 15 (guitar solo/duet 1c): At this point I was getting annoyed at how the metal guitar’s part never seems to change, mostly because you can really hear it that well. in every sheet, it’s playing constant 16th notes.
SHEET 16 (drum solo/EPIC 1a): My god. I don’t even want to speak, for fear my words will make the solo sound worse than it is. There’s no higher praise I can give you for your drumming.
SHEET 17 (drum solo/OMG IT CONTINUES 1b): Re-use of the fade-in…never mind. The drum solo was perfection.
Sheet 18 (transition 3): I actually quite liked this sheet, despite the fact that it seems a little rushed, like you couldn’t think of a way to transition directly from the drum solo to the chorus so you added it in. Still love it though
Sheet 19 (chorus 3a): Nice, but a bit repetitive. I didn’t even notice the higher melody until I went back to sheet 10. Because of sheet 18, you could have introduced a key changed chorus here and it could’ve been great if done correctly.
Sheet 20 (chorus 3b): I like how the solo spilled into the chorus a bit here. Very nice. Oh, and because I haven’t mentioned it yet, I love the use of the drum reverb and my fade-in cymbal effect.
Sheet 21 (chorus 4a/outro a): Again, I like the solo-y bits during the chorus, mostly because it’s played by the acoustic. But instead of using copy-pasta, why not write something unique into each sheet? For instance, why are the 16th notes always in measure 3? And if you were planning on an ending solo in the chorus, doesn’t it make more sense to keep sheet 20 more like sheet 19 and have super a crazy solo through sheets 21 and 22?
Sheet 22 (chorus 4b/outro :D: Was glad to hear some faster notes in this sheet, but it’s still about the same as sheets 20 and 21, just with minor deviations.
Sheet 23 (ending): I know no one can really end a song properly, but I might have liked a good ending drum solo. The one you have in place is a bit to linear, it needs some more cymbal-work.
In short, it’s a great song, just lacking a bit of sound. I’d rate it a 4.1/5. Oh, and I guess I lied about agreeing with Nuse, I didn’t see the song as repetitive, even reviewing each sheet individually.
My thought’s on this style of review: It’s better structured, and I think I really go over everything with this. Only cons I see are the length of the review, and I miss transitions between sheets when looking at one sheet alone, and have to go back (such as with sheets 8 and 9).
P.S. Review of tranquility to come out soon, I can’t believe what I miss in the forums.
I just thought that it was hard to distinguish between the different parts. And don’t say thank you to me any more, Star’s here.
THE PANNING
OW
MY EARS.
It was a great song, but that panning hurt my ears so much that I couldn’t enjoy past sheet 8…
EDIT: OW OW OW OW OW
It wasn’t that bad…
Yes it was! My ears have always hated panning, to the point it makes it so I can’t breath…
I usually hate panning that is all the way to one side, but this song’s fine on that respect.
EDIT: RIP 5th and 6th bot post, you will NOT be missed.
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