You want to feature it? But wait some time first, we just featured two new songs.
Perceptiveā¦well either way itās not really up to me or Sandal.
āDmin7 add4 -5ā I think thatās what itās called, oh and about the other song, I have got some composers block after writing some riffs without really good transitions (maybe because I changed the drums every time ) and I am STILL buried deep in schoolwork
But thatās impossibleā¦thereās no D in the chord, unless you change the Eb to a D#. Are you sure you are looking at the right chord? The one Iām talking about is the one in sheet 1, measure 13.
I was thinking of the ending chord, that one is an 11th chord, I think you can call it a Phrygian 11th because it is the root 11th of the Phrygian mode, or I guess you could call it Fmin 11 b9, and you voiced it with the 11th an octave lower so it is more dissonant.
Not Much to say
I felt like I was at a circus (just a bit)
Just wait until the solo.
But itās still pretty awesomeā¦
It was good ā¦ but it was really repetitive and kinda lacked substance. Those hi-hats were especially repetitive.
Itās obvious you were trying to make a ballad type song.
Unfortunately, ballads are usually a smooth type. This song would do much better if it was sped up.
Volume control issues in some parts. The soloās beginning fit. Thatās about as much as I enjoyed.
The hi-hat choice in this was awful.
The end was good, until the voxes came in.
It was heavily repetitive. This is mainly due to no kind of verse to your chorus.
Mainly the part I didnāt understand is why the strats were so short during the āverse.ā
Also, styles didnāt fit. The bass and voxes were smooth and connected. The other parts werenāt.
At the end of the solo, instead of putting sixteenth notes, instead put some type of slow but enjoyable rhythm.
What I canāt stress enough is how the style of music didnāt fit the tempo.
The solo sucks. The rest of it is good.
Wow. Triple Post. I like how people ignore me.
I used a lot of other ideas from songs, including:
āBlack Bettyā - Ram Jam (Hi-hat at beginning)
āYou Should Be Dancingā - Beegees (Rhythm from the bass solo)
āJuke Box Heroā - Foreigner (The Metal Guitar at the beginning)
āYYZā - Rush (The Solos setup)
āDonāt Tell me You Love Meā - Night Ranger (Solo - Bridge - Shorter Solo)
and so onā¦
Please critique this one.
The intro sounded a bit, umm, funky lol.
Also the main drum beat sounded a tad bit annoying, but only a tad (I liked it more than I didnāt)
I was also expecting an epic solo (Normally your solos are quite good), but I felt disappointed, since it didnāt go that way when I think it easily could have.
I still give it a 5/5 since I think this song was expertly put together! Nice job!
EDIT: Temple of Trickery
By what Iāve heard so far (30 seconds or so after you take out the green synth) you need to do these things:
A: Take out the vocals
B: Take out anything that is remotely a drum soloā¦ sorry to say but those were phailz D: (Kamarai is disappoint)
EDIT2: ToT again
ummā¦ solo wasnāt that bad.
Sheet 26/27 Drum solo! Yayz toms! (Kamarai is only slightly disappoint)
Suddenly the song doesnāt know what it wants to be and other stuff
? What is this a really long solo? I donāt know exactly how to describe it but after sheet 28 or so it seems like you just randomly decided to change everything every couple of sheets, and the transitions were almost nonexistant.
EDIT3: Around like sheet 36ā¦
Oh
So thats the solo
nvm about what I saidā¦ (well my solos arenāt that much better)
I decided to go more control on this song. I didnāt want some epic super fast solo that sounded random. I felt like making a more slow solo.
The hi-hats were definitely too loud.
ToT was more of a put together of some ideas. (I have a lot of experimental songs. Example: Test Made)
just posted a new song, itās pretty awesome. Can anyone give me some tips though?
Ok so, here is a what I thought your piece. Itās all my opinion, donāt take it too seriously. Iām also trying to be as honest as possible, so it might be a little harsh.
Starts off a little empty.
I was liking the clavinets in sheet 2 until the jump from Bb to D (try and avoid jumps over 5 notes).
Synths getting a little repetitive. You can change the melody a little.
Sheet 6 seemed a little empty, because of the gaps in fender strats.
Reintroducing the synths in the middle of sheet 8 seemed irregular. Bring in the synths at the beginning of a sheet.
Synths repetitive again, and emptiness too.
I liked sheet 4 a lot.
Sheet 12: the metal guitars are clashing with the other guitars
(Also the first half of sheet 13 sounded like part of another song (and 20 too)ā¦ not a problem but Iām annoyed I canāt think of it.)
Same problem with sheet 8 on sheet 13.
I didnāt like the transition between sheet 13 and 14. I think because the synthesizers in 14 were getting repetitive.
In measure 3 of sheet 14, the violin and clavinet clash at G# + B (if you donāt mind getting rid of the minorish feel, you can change the G# to a G)
The end of the melody in measure 18 ends a bit abruptly.
The ending was good ā¦ until the last chord. It was way too weak and short.
All in all, I felt the chorus didnāt really stand out. (Iām guessing it was the synth part.)
Also feel free to add long notes/chords at the beginning of each measure. It might strengthen it a little. I did like the chords a lot though.
I know I didnāt really give any positive criticism, but song was very good. Has some great catchy melodies, but a tiny bit repetitive and the teensiest bit empty. I know you tried, and I can see you improved. Well done! 4.5/5
This has actually been in my song page for a while. I guess I just randomly decided to post it.
Good!
@ finalboss: That was pretty good
@ Nuse: Thanks for the criticism
What was the song that part of my thing reminded you of? (I donāt know of any songs that sound like that, but maybe I heard it a long time ago and it got stuck in my head)
I knew EXACTLY what you meant here, as I had the same problem. This song reminded me of another song from a while back, and I realized it was because the chord-progression is C-B-E-D. Then I remembered what the phrase sounded like, and played it over and over until I was reminded of a particularly harsh debate on how to properly critique songs in the critique thread, over this song:
Now Iām not trying to slander Maxās reputation (I know there was that whole fiasco over Unknowedās song getting stolen), itās probably just a coincidence. I see no reason for anything to happen because of this, I just happened to notice it.
As for your song, TFB (if I may call you that), I have to admit I am a sucker for bluesy triplets, but the song is too fast, and too empty for too long. The rather larger slow-down didnāt really help, as it was just as repetitive, and didnāt really fit. Solo was quite fun, and the drumming was good in some places and bad in others. Iāll have nothing else to say on that.