Bridgebreaker is out. Comments? Note: I was lacking inspration so don’t get too harsh.
Hold on, Listening…
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EDIT:Meh…i donno. Atleast it’s better than what i can do… Though a bit repetitive
Aight, here we go:
Intro was okay. It fitted into your usual style so it got repetitive quickly. The way the drums came in sounded great…but then you stuck with it throughout the entire piece. After sheet 1, you should have used a different, more aggressive drum beat. The synth #1 melody that came in was okay, but again, it fitted into your usual style and didn’t really catch my attention. The bass #4 was kinda bleh. It didn’t look like you put any effort into it. You just dropped it one octave lower than the synthesizer #1 and called it variation. No siree. Also, sheet 9 felt kinda unnecessary. Sheet 10 was kinda cool. The bass drums sounded funny…in a good way. The strat guitar melody was pretty good and it caught my attention for a while but then you went back to sheet 6, which was like a slap to the face because I thought the strat was gonna lead into a bitchin’ chorus. After that, something new finally came in.The high tambourine had a cool beat and the fender melody was okay. After that, well, nothing exciting happened. 2.5/5
C’mon man, I miss those days when you composed songs like So Long, So Blind and Blood Rush.
Don’t force yourself to write something if you can’t think of anything to write. Take your time. Nobody’s rushing you. Shit, look at my thread. I haven’t composed anything in forever and I haven’t started any projects at all. I only compose if I get an idea.
cracks fingers
Aight, here we go.
Intro was okay. It fitted into your usual style but got repetit-…looks up
Damn… beat me to it.
I used a colon, not a period lololol
Geez guys. Now you make me feel like I can’t make music. I don’t know what to do now.
maked something super awesome and 10 minuets long instead of short pieces of crap.
I’m not trying to put you down. All I’m trying to tell you is don’t compose if you don’t have inspiration or at least an idea. Do something different, listen to other people’s works, wait till your creativity sparks. Composing isn’t fun if you force yourself to write melodies.
Creativity only came back to snag a cupcake…
Gray Wilted Flowers is the right way to use 8th notes. Good job
Well I saw your post in the Unfinished songs thread and decided to migrate my critisizm to your unfinished song… here, since its more relevant… kinda. Its building up to being one of your best in awhile (not that thats something to be proud of ) But theres one thing that I figured out was missing from this song thats been missing in all your latest songs…
Ready for the PROTIP of the century?..
The song… it is missing liveliness.
Now this can mean anything
- Its to damn generic
- Its to damn boring
- Its to damn slow
- ITS TO DAMN BORING
Your song unfortunately is a victim of all three. Here Is what I suggest you do to add liveliness.
- Change up tempo where necessary.
- Stop repeating the same sheets over. Seriously In my honest opinion the only sheet that should be repeated is the chorus, and if you do repeat a sheet damnit if better be put to good use. (this doesn’t just refer to you, it refers to everyone. SERIOUSLY, if I was a mod I would post a topic with just this rule and sticky it.)
- If you truly believe there is even a bit of repetition (which no one is a fan of, particularly me) DO SOMETHING ABOUT IT. PROTIP: If something seems just a little repetitive to you, its about 15x more repetitive to everyone else.
- Add drum fills, add guitar fills, add a layer of a guitar solo on top of a chorus, ROCK YOUR HEART OUT.
- MIX IT UP A LIL BIT. If you use a total of 3 instruments in your song you will desperately be lacking liveliness.
Hopefully with this post will lift your song up from a 2.5 to a 4 [/criticism you probably would just ignore anyway and resume regular formula]
P.S.
6) Epicness is your first goal when it comes to composing.
I thought Unknowned’s unfinished song was pretty good. The beginning was a bit boring but the guitar sounded great.
Thank you ANTHONY.
Comment towards Roastmasters: …
IMPORTANT MESSAGE: My next song is coming out very soon. If it CANNOT make a better impression or upon good judgement, I will quit Notessimo because some people are being jerks. Not DarkDan, not Fish, not Anthony…but I won’t say who it is.
But if the song cannot do better I will never return again. Hope that one person is happy.
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The Existance. NOTE: The only reason I repeated the final chorus more than before was because I thought the final chorus would be too short…if this song fails…I quit.
I can not believe I am just about to write this wall of text to prevent one of the few good active notessimoers from leaving especially when I could be preaching about the proper usage of the word People… now before I say anything, lets get this out of the way.
You said it yourself. Criticism. its a good thing, and I criticize you using something called the Unknowned Scale. The Unknowned scale is a scale only used on one of Unknowneds’ songs. The unknowned scale is just like every other scale expect with incredibly high standards, mostly because people expect pure greatness out of you. The point of the unknowned scale is to make criticizing a great song much much more convenient for the author of the song. If I never used the unknowned scale, my incredibly harsh opinions that (hopefully) helped you to be unknowned today would be nothing but praise… and praise has never improved anybody right? Example. I gave Wishgranter a what? 2.5 or something. Thats a 2.5 on the unknowned scale. If I wasn’t using the Unknowned scale its pretty much just a solid 4.5. All your songs are 4.5-5.0 minus the Unknowned scale. It seems the only reason anyone would give any of your songs something below a 4/5 is because, like me, they had high expectation of you. Right now it seems as if the critisicm I give to you using the unknowned scale seems to be taken personal instead of just simple self improving criticism. Protip of the day: Criticism, not meant to be taken personal.
Now if you WANT me to turn my unknowned scale off, so all you can get whenever you complete a song is a “Great Job” or “Nice song”, instead of useful critique that make a musician a musician then just let me know, and when you do let me know, be sure to take out the heading of the OP I mentioned earlier in my post, its really misleading.
Your song is going to be hard to criticize. Mostly because its pretty hard to criticize something thats almost flawless so instead I will review it with my unknowned scale off.
Intro- 10/10 All your introductions are 10/10
Chorus- 7/10 Sounded to much like the beginning.
Outro- 9/10 Faded out perfectly but came to sudden (lol inorite)
Melody- 10/10 See fender
Metal Guitar usage- 10/10 Bonus for perfect execution.
Fender Usage- 9.5/10 It goes on the whole song and for some reason I dont get tired of it.
Strings usage- 9/10 See metal guitar
Drums- 6.5/10 Made it sound technoish. Roast highly dislikes techno, and it was smart to make your almost swan song Rock.
4.9/5. I say its better than about 4/5ths of your discography, now don’t quit notessimo, go back and make something godly.
Protip #7: Your motive for every song you make should not for the sake of making a song… but for the sake of making your best song yet…no… the best on notessimo. The Beatles followed that rule, look what they accomplished.
I hope this post has brought an epiphany upon you all. /roastmiester moment
Well I guess I’m not leaving.
I’m gonna have to go with Roast on this. Constructive criticism, however harsh, is a good thing…unless the person doesn’t even like the genre of music you compose in the first place. If you want to get better, then listen to what the reviewer has to say, say “okay, I’ll keep that in mind,” and use the criticism to enhance your abilities. Also, if you seriously considered leaving Notessimo because of a few recent sub-par compositions, then just leave. No artist is going to release amazing works out of their ass, however talented he or she is. Bad works are part of the journey and it’s something you need to get use to if you want to submit something good.
And jeez, Roast, what’s with you and getting other people mad? First, it was you versus DarkChameleon. Then it was you versus me. Remember that argument about electronic music? Yeah fuck you, man 
And now, it’s you versus
Unknowned. LOLOL
Now let’s get to the song:
Intro started off weak but suddenly became catchy. Metal guitar was overpowering. The fender melody was excellent. The drumwork was great. Strong and catchy. I liked it. The metal guitar melody…ehh not so good. I really don’t like the sound of the metal guitar when it’s placed somewhere on the treble clef. It really dry. But it’s not your fault I guess…The low metal guitar notes helped bring back some energy to the song. The second fender melody was really cool. It got my attention. The sheet 30 transition was shaky. Yeah…that’s something you need to work on. The ending was also ineffective. Umm…work on that too. Overall, it was pretty good. I enjoyed it. 4.2/5
Im pretty sure I pissed off darkdan with my over confidence and hypo with my senseless topic derailing too. And the thing is Its always an accident.
But yeah electronic music… moar liek unce unce unce music lololololololol