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P.S It Has 667 Words. The Time Machine Story.
Cooper Is My “Gametag”.
This has multiple punctuation errors. This is how you write a story.
This is a trashed story btw. Unless you think I should finish it.
“So, this is Ponyville", I said to myself as I stepped out of the chariot that was pulled by two pegasi.
“Not bad.” I praised the scenery
I took my luggage out of the chariot and thanked the two pegasi before they took off. I stood and stared at the spot they had disappeared for what seemed like centuries before I came back to reality.
“Right.” I said, pulling myself together.
I pulled out the note I had wrote regarding the house address Princess Celestia had bought for me.
" She didn’t have to buy a house for me to be able to stay here," I told myself, “though I am going to be here for a year. So, I might as well be grateful.”
I began my travel to the house dragging my luggage along with me
" Why couldn’t they drop me off at the house?!" I grumbled to the air.
As I hitchhiked to my destination I began to observe the scenery more closely. The path was cobbled with limestone and granite, the fields of tall grass moved
fluidly with the breeze almost as if it were its own movements. The breeze, it smelled of fresh hay and… perspiration? I looked around to see if there was
another pony nearby. But there was nopony to be found. I began to move on, it wasn’t long before I caught glimpse of the town.
" Looks like this is my stop." I said as the town came closer as each step pasted.
Suddenly, a cyan blur along with a strong breeze whooshed by me. Inches away from my face.
" Whoa!" I yelled, jolting backwards.
I searched the skies for anything that might have scared me.
" Probably just my imagination." I said before turning and coming face to face with a cyan, multi-color maned, pegasus pony.
" Probably." Said the pegasus pony.
" GAAAH!" I yelled before falling flat on my back and dropping my luggage on the ground.
" Buahahahahaha." The pegasus pony began laughing and rolling on the ground.
" Mother of Celestia, you could have given me a heart-attack." I said, slowly getting up to gather my luggage once again. I looked at the pegasus pony a little more
closely, who was still busy laughing and rolling on the ground.
" Wait a second, I know you, aren’t you that pony that was making those obnoxious faces while I was busy guarding the entrance to the palace?" I asked,
surprised to see the pony once more.
" That was you?" She said after she was able to regain her composer from the fits of laughter. " I knew you looked familiar."
I looked at her with slight annoyance.
" What." She said, giving a defensive look.
" Why are you bothering me anyway?" I said, with a unreadable poker face that I’d always use while at my post.
" Come on, don’t be a party pooper. I was just flying around outside town. Getting some fresh air when I spotted you. So I’d thought I’d cheer you up." She said
with a wide smile.
" Do I look like I need cheering up." I said, pointing a hoof at my face.
“… Yeah” She said, who clearly wasn’t getting the point.
I heaved a heavy sigh.
" Whats your problem?" She asked, staring at my face as if trying to remember a long lost friend.
" Nothing. Forget it, anyways, the names Nova." I said, holding out a hoof.
She stared at my hoof, then my face.
" Nova, huh? My name’s Rainbow Dash." She said, taking my hoof and giving it a hardy shake. " I’ve got to be going, one thing I think I should tell you before I go."
" Yeah?" I asked.
" If you meet someone named Pinkie Pie. You should be expecting a party by the end of the day. When she sees a new pony in town, it’s like a tradition for her to
throw a party for them" said Rainbow Dash before taking off towards the town.
I began to do something I hadn’t done in 19 years from that point on. I began to smile again.
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Oh man Twisted, I thought you were still writing it. ;n;
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That Is Amazing! I Know There Is Some Errors In the Story. I’m Getting Rid Of Them.
If you want to see the story mail me.
Still Working On It. Over 2500 words I’ll Tellya When It’s Finished.
I’ll Make A My Little Pony Story When I’ve Seen Eough Episodes To Know Where Everything is.
I Really Liked The Story! 4/5!
It’s going well! But hard to read, you should add more pauses to your sentences. Also you could use “inverted commas” around speech!
my punctuation isnt that good.
Ahem
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Brocookie?
What Ever Happened To the Soup?!
Your doing it again. )X
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Jezus Theres Like 3 Post Complaining About Aliens Grammer LOL Every One Should Stop Complaining Because He Is Spelling Every Thing Correctly.
What I looked In The Dictionary And In Big Bold Letters It Said AL!3N SSS433LLS CuW3TLy Im Not Lying. =3
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Your jokes are not funny.
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I thought it was pretty good. Stop bagging on Yellowtail and bag on Timothy… COME ON he make TERRIBLE SONGS!
Force of habit. :s
I once started a story about a war between aliens and Nintendo Characters… Really Complicated.
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