implying I’ve not been making anything as of late…
Maybe I should be publishing in the unfinished songs thread.
Well you haven’t really been posting lately. Your last thing was a collab with Sandal two months ago.
So umm, wow. Cartrox got this finished incredibly quickly. Time for some shameless self-promotion!
Did I start that shameless self-promotion thing?
Anyway, not really in the mood for criticizing.
Um, some moments were extremely bland compared to other sheets.
blah blah blah boring independent sheets blah blah blah
4.3/5
LOL
That’s probably just me. It’s my first finished collab adding on to someone’s song just so you know. I’ll probably make more collabs in the future.
Well actually, most of what I wrote was quite bland except for the chorus. You did great in sheets that used my piano triplets though.
Did you notice that I added a little hi-hat solo in the second verse? 
Oh yeah, sorry I haven’t had much chance to actually listen to it with headphones, and the song does have a lot to remember.
You are great at making songs, so can you do my contest?
It’s funny cause i asked for that collaboration to break the 2+ month spree of not publishing anything…[devious plan]and cause i loved your music i did that so i could hear more [/devious plan]
I liked it but it was kinda bland in some places (as already stated) but the one thing i really noticed that i wasn’t the biggest fan of was the slowly descending pianos…
I don’t have time right now, and it was always going to be an “if I get around to it” deal.
I’m not sure I follow. Does that mean you asked Cartrox to add on to my song, or are you talking about our collab (which I still want to continue, btw)?
Sorry that wasn’t clarified the best…XD
seeing as you took time out of your tired and drowsy night to criticize my song I may as well spend the rest of this night doing the same. Keep in mind im probably as close as I can be to being drunk right now (herp derp).
Intro: Starting with the intro, the song basically jumps straight into the bass riff, and while it is very catchy I think that was very lazy for you to do (did I mention this criticism is going to be 100% unbaised to anything we’ve discussed in chatzy, im also speaking through this review as if the song was done by one person), even though I do like the intros that introduce a riff I generally try to go against it because its both really easy and not creative. I also don’t like the standard buildup into the next section of the intro, the synth just climbs up into one note, and the bass drum just doubles on itself every hit, and it has a fade into the the next section. You see those done in nearly half of every techno song. I also do not know why the open hi hat #2 with panning was put there. Was it there for a filler to make the song seem less empty? were you worried about the repetition and decided that you needed something over the repeating bass? I personally think this is not one of your most well done intros. Although I do like the small things you do like the low green synth that, while you can barely hear it, does provide some amount of filler to make the song sound less empty. Continuing into the next part of the intro (were 16 seconds into the song ). I really like this part of the intro, you’ve built up all that energy and instead of releasing it (I speak of energy as in intensity of the music), or building it up even higher you hold on to it for a little while and then release it when the drums come in. I also don’t like the choice of the synth bass for the next part because it is a really dark instrument and most of the song doesn’t sound very dark, especially with the female voxes, and the synth melody sounds very major. heading into sheet 9 I really like the drums ,even for as simple as they are it is very clear and easy to hear all of the cymbals and drums. I really love the synth bass melody because it makes great use of the instrument! I don’t think any other instrument would be able to pull it off, but I still stick with my previous point about the synth bass.
Chorus:If I thought I liked the drums earlier than I love the drums in this part. Its much more fast paced and fits the position of the song in the chorus (as the chorus is supposed to be more energetic), but I think the drums are too distracting and loud. Since the bass is the same as the previous few phrases im not gonna say anything new except its harder to hear the more fancier parts like the slide and the really high notes. As for the synth part I really wish that you could’ve made it quite louder, but other than that I think it was a very great choice of instrument to use in the chorus, even if its the most common one on notessimo. I really wish I could’ve heard the second layer of synth that got added on then I could tell you more about it, I also think that you should have made the synth louder because the transition into the verse is all muffled and its hard to hear what goes on the beat before it. As for the female voxes I think they add a very angelic theme to the song and add a chord progression which is good, but I don’t like the transition into the next part because they got louder all of a sudden, with no buildup of any kind.
First verse: Like I said before I don’t like the transition from the chorus to this verse at all. As for the vocals I felt like i was a bit lazy for you to just rip out the vox chords and just continue it alongside with a bass drum but looking into the next part, it was necessary to some extent. I especially don’t like how you made the vox chords so loud then really really quiet into the next part. I especially don’t like this because they were almost the same volume in the chorus. Heading into sheet 4 I really like the drumming in here, those cymbals added a lot more excitement in this section as most of the piano part is very boring and you can barely hear the bass. It also helps bring out the beat more, but what I don’t like about it is its very disruptive and distracting. As for the piano I feel like its really slow for this song. I think the melody should have been more fitting to the flow of the song. As for the piano triplets I think the piano’s sound lovely and are more fitting to the flow of the song than the previous section, but I think there needs to be more drums to help keep a beat because transitioning to triplets can be tricky to make fit. Now for sheet 3, I am glad that you finally went away from the previous chord progression, removing some of the repetition. I really think the bass could be louder in this section, I think overall one of the biggest issues so far is volume control. The piano part is ok, but much differently flowing than the last part. The previous section was smooth while this section is just like jabbing it with a stick. as for the drumming I feel like you did a good job of having it fit the flow of the section, although I don’t like the bass drum in this part, and some of the snare hits are cut off, I think you did good at matching that. Now for the next part. I don’t know the technical term for it in techno but I know some people use this and im gonna try and explain what I think it is. I imagine it as like a gimmick that you can use in techno that’s supposed to sound like a CD skipping, or a DJ messing with the disc, and I quite like it when artists use that. Now as for it being a transition I feel like its very tricky to use but it was fun to listen to and it was executed quiet well as a transition into another section (although I do believe it wasn’t completely necessary). As for the next section, the drumming it completely lazy, the hi hat is too loud, sometimes the bass drum is at 251% volume and sometimes its at 100% volume, the drum reverb doesn’t really fit, the drumming pretty much a mess.I can’t hear the bass. If all of these were fixed I would think it would be a great transition pre chorus section. Then you transition into the chorus. No changes which is fine since its a chorus.
second verse: I really don’t like the transition from the chorus to this section at all. You go from having 15 instruments on the screen to just green synth chords which are exactly the same as the vox chord progression. Its even more lazily done than the transition from the first verse. I don’t understand why you didn’t build on to the end of sheet 16. It stay’s there for 1 phrase then vanishes, only to be replaced by a drum solo. Ill get onto the drum solo later but the end of sheet 16 sounded nice and clever and could have been a good way to buildup into something if you held onto it longer. As for the drum solo, a lot of it doesn’t fit, and it doesn’t really help put emphasis on the beat. It could have been much better than it was there. As for the chords they were just very lazy, but I do like the sound the synth and the vocals make when there put on top of each other. As for going back into the piano triplets anything I said before about them still applies here. Now sheet 18 is something i’ve been bugged about for a while now. Cartr0x im going to give you some advice (says the guy who knows nothing about techno music), when you grown up and hopefully go into a more professional musical environment, the programs that you use will be very good and allow you a very, very large range of notes. What I don’t like about sheet 18 is that you go down until you hit the bottom. Professional techno artists with there programs that have like twice the amount of notes notessimo has, will not go all the way to the bottom, because that will take forever and be annoying. They plan for a specific note to stop at, so that’s my advice to you. Plan for a note to stop at, don’t just go till you hit the bottom of whatever program your using is capable of. Now as for criticizing sheet 18, I think its very empty, lazy, and unnecessary. I also think the following sheet 6 is empty, doesn’t match, and is very lazy as well. Overall verse 2 did not nearly last as long as verse 1 did. That is because you had gotten lazy and that needs to be worked on.
Ending: Finally coming to a close. So after repeating the chorus 2 times (which is fine) I thought you were going to make the ending unique. Then I wasn’t surprised that you just ripped out that same chord progression from the chorus and just repeated it twice along with a fade in on the last note. I think you can get the gist that im going to say that was also very lazy. So to go back and talk about all of the big things I thought this song needed or was missing. Slight amount of repetition for the chord progression (not a big deal though), some parts are empty due to laziness, and you need to pay more attention to the flow of song when your adding parts. So on stars scale I would give it a 4.2/5, on my scale its a 4.0/5. BTW if you see any problems in the writing (there are probably a crap ton knowing me), I didn’t proof read it because I need to get to something quick (im coming octo D:). Also cartr0x about me finishing the ending… im just on a complete writers block because I cannot come up with anything at all.
Let the contest of the longest post begin
XD!!
Keep up the good feedback teddy 
the more criticism the better!!
You should space the review out a lot more though. Also I didn’t read it at all. :4
NEVER!!!
NEVER!!!
Do your job, Muse.
I was laughing through this whole argument.
Me? I’m just glad a bot hasn’t shown up yet.